The idea sort of struck me when I was reading about the moon (I don't know why. Boredom?) Anyway, the warrior thing sort of got me out of nowhere and before I knew it, my fingers were typing...this.
1.) Does the overall theme seem a bit... disturbing?
2.) Was the story going too fast?
3.) What do you think about the repetitiveness of some words? (Like the way the word 'blood' is repeated in some sentences)
4.) Did I manage to give you something about the character (I mean like her personality or her past. Oh I don't know how to say it!) in the story without revealing too much?
5.) Did it give some sort of air of mystery in it?
6.) Did it flow right?
Any other comments and critiques will be greatly appreciated~!
Sorry for the multitude of questions XD